Going Places

Volcanic Ash

2010-05-14T14:48:00.005+12:00

Mikaiah has been learning how to write a good paragraph. the first sentence usually has the main ideas. The second sentence adds detail and ideas to the first sentence. The third sentence adds more details and ideas to the second sentence. Read his great paragraph about the volcanic ash.

The volcanic ash is on the cars. Can you imagine what would happen if the ash was exploding out of the volcano. If volcanic ash was pouring all over you it would be hot and dangerous.

The Goggles

2010-05-09T22:41:00.003+12:00

In her classroom Josephine wrote a paragraph about some goggles she found at the baths. Her goal is to use words and sentences that make her work interesting and easily understood by the reader. She worked hard with the teacher to improve her writing by recrafting and proof reading it. See her draft and her recrafted writing below. Great work Josephine

Draft:
the goggles looked like real glasses . the swimming goggles is a colour of white and blue and it has a diamond. the goggles can protect your eyes the goggles can let you see in the water.
its making sure that you dont get sore eyes. the eye piece is the shape of an oval. the goggles is hanged up on the board.

Recrafted:

The goggles looked like real glasses. They were white and blue and had a diamond right in the middle. When you wore the glasses they let you see in the water and they protected your eyes. The eye piece was shaped like an oval. They hung up on the board.

The Pigs at Ambury Farm

2010-04-28T14:25:00.004+12:00

Jordan went to Ambury Farm. He liked the pigs so he wrote about them.
After he wrote his draft he worked hard with the teacher to make his sentences even more interesting.

Draft:

At Ambury farm the pig had a hairy back and the piglets had a curly tail. The pig had a dusty back. The piglets were greedy.

Re-crafted:

At Ambury Farm I saw a sleeping pig with a hairy, pink back. It was standing up sleeping and it had a dusty back. About six piglets with curly tails were playing on the mud. They were greedy because they were trying to get the dusty pigs milk.

Assembly

2010-04-28T12:47:00.003+12:00

Nikita wrote a short introduction about school assembly. She looked closely at her draft writing and then worked hard with the teacher to make her introduction more detailed and interesting for the reader.

Draft:

This morning we had a assembly in the school hall. Then the whole school went there too.
There were lots of characters in the hall.

Re-crafted:

This summer morning the whole school had Assembly in the Hall. All the children sat on the floor. The teachers sat on the seats by the side of the wall and some parents sat on the back seats. Mr Burt and his helpers were at the front with the guitar and the stickers.

The Leaf

2010-04-28T11:45:00.002+12:00

Mikaiah wrote about a leaf he found out on the grass. He and the teacher looked at his writing to see how he could make it more interesting by using different kinds of sentences and sentence beginnings.
Read the work below and see how he made his writing better.

Draft :
My leaf has holes on the right side. It looks goldish also greenish too. It has a bit of yellow on the stem. It looks brown too. It has cuts too.

Re-crafted :
I held my goldish and greenish leaf by the short stem. On the stem there were yellow and brown stripes. Two little black holes and a deep cut spoilt the leaf's smooth right side.

At the Picnic

2010-03-24T14:11:00.002+13:00

While at the school picnic Nikki had lots of
fun on the beach discovering all sorts of
interesting objects.

Morning Fitness

2010-03-23T12:42:00.003+13:00

Every morning Lee and his class have fitness.
They do a variety of different activities to make
them fresh and alert for the rest of the day.

Welcome Back

2010-03-17T12:23:00.003+13:00

The Going Places Bloggers are jumping for joy because they are so happy to be at school in term 1.

Nikki

2009-12-07T12:25:00.000+13:00

For her last post of the year Nikki wrote about
herself.

Summer

2009-12-06T12:21:00.000+13:00

Lee has been thinking about the Summer and
looking for signs. Listen to him to find out
about his favourite time of the year.

I am Josephine

2009-12-05T12:17:00.000+13:00

Josephine would like to share some information
with you about herself.

Jelly For Your Belly!

2009-12-04T12:12:00.000+13:00

Jordan has tried hard to write an interesting
recount of the jelly making experience he
shared with his class.

The Athletic Sports

2009-12-03T12:08:00.002+13:00

The Zone Athletic Sports were held at Pt England
School. Listen to Cezar read his report of that
great event.

It's all about me!

2009-12-03T12:05:00.002+13:00

Nikita has written about herself and included
lots of important details.

Oh What a Noise!

2009-11-13T12:27:00.004+13:00

Oh What a Noise!

My Wonderful Teacher

2009-10-30T07:59:00.002+13:00

Listen to Nikita read her story and find out what
kind of a teacher she has!

Food Glorious Food

2009-10-30T07:32:00.002+13:00

Josephine had great ideas to write about after our
Immersion Assembly for the topic 'Food, Glorious
Food'. She and Nikita reworked the story to make
it more detailed and really interesting for the
audience.

The Tooth Fairy

2009-09-25T12:09:00.002+12:00

Have you ever wondered where your teeth go
to when they fall out? Watch our movie to
find out!

The Hare and the Tortoise - A Retelling

2009-09-10T07:49:00.002+12:00

Mikaiah has written his best piece yet!
What interesting words he has used to make
his retelling sound just like the book! So well
read too.

Hansel and Gretel

2009-09-10T07:35:00.002+12:00

Josephine has retold the story of Hansel and
Gretel and how they escaped from the witch.
She is getting better and better at reading
her work with expression.

The Scary Wolf

2009-08-30T20:42:00.002+12:00

Listen to Jordan read his story and find out why
Little Red Riding Hood dropped the flowers.

What happened to Snow White?

2009-08-30T20:19:00.003+12:00

Listen to Lee's version of the poisoning of
Snow White.

The Thick Red Cloak

2009-08-30T20:04:00.003+12:00

Listen to Josephine read her favourite part of
the Little Red Riding Hood story. She wrote
it herself!

I am Not Your Grandma!

2009-08-21T12:39:00.002+12:00

Cezar has tried really hard to read his story
with lots of expression so it sounds exciting.

So Afraid.

2009-08-21T12:33:00.002+12:00

Nikita wrote about why Little Red Riding Hood
was afraid of the Big Bad Wolf.

The Story Teller

2009-08-21T10:25:00.004+12:00

Mikaiah wrote about the Story Teller who
came to school.

The Spelling Bee

2009-08-13T15:31:00.002+12:00

Listen to Nikki's report of Team 2's Spelling
Bee Competition.

Cezar's Birthday

2009-08-13T13:04:00.002+12:00

Cezar's Dad gave him a wonderful present for
his birthday. Listen to his story to find out
more about it.

The Fairy Dust

2009-08-01T22:06:00.002+12:00

Listen to Nikita read her story about how
Cinderella got a beautiful gown.

The Fairy Godmother

2009-07-31T21:49:00.002+12:00

Josephine loved learning about Cinderella.
She wishes she had a magic wand like the Fairy
Godmother.

2009-07-31T21:32:00.004+12:00

Nikki has been learning about Cinderella.
She wrote about her favourite part of the story.

Nikki drew Cinderella's beautiful gown.

My Trampoline

2009-07-28T10:24:00.003+12:00

Mikaiah loves his trampoline. Listen to his
writing to find out why!

Poor Cinderella

2009-07-28T10:11:00.003+12:00

Cezar has been reading Cinderella and lots of
other Fairy Stories.
Listen to him read his writing that tells
us about Cinderella.

Dino-Might

2009-07-01T09:52:00.004+12:00

The 'Going Places' group made a movie about
dinosaurs to finish off the term.

Can you describe T.Rex?

2009-06-25T09:45:00.000+12:00

What do you know about T.Rex? Nikita
describes and explains all about him in her
informative writing.

2009-06-24T21:45:00.001+12:00

What do you know about T.Rex? Listen to Nikita
describe and explain all about him when she reads
her great

Long and Tall like a Slide

2009-06-24T21:16:00.002+12:00

Listen to Nikki and find out about the tall
and long dinosaur.

At The Museum

2009-06-24T21:01:00.004+12:00

Cezar is really good at reading his own writing
about the Museum visit in a clear and
expressive voice.

Wonderful Dinosaur

2009-06-24T20:52:00.003+12:00

Listen to Josephine's report on her favourite
dinosaur and learn lots of important information.

Bike Action

2009-06-16T09:37:00.002+12:00

After school and at the weekend Mikaiah and
his two brothers have lots of fun on their bikes.

The Perfect Day

2009-06-14T20:31:00.003+12:00

Marama had a wonderful day at Rebekah's
house. She has tried hard to make her writing
about that day interesting for you to listen to.

My Brother's Birthday

2009-06-14T20:19:00.003+12:00

Nikita has been learning to think of ideas to write
about that will give the reader lots of information.
Listen to her writing about her brother's birthday
to find out what she did at his party.

T.Rex the Hunter

2009-05-19T10:05:00.003+12:00

Cezar knows all about T.Rex. Listen to his
informative story and learn some amazing
dinosaur facts.

Scary Dinosaur

2009-05-12T20:00:00.003+12:00

Listen to Josephine read her written work
about dinosaurs. She uses a lovely clear
voice and lots of expression to share her
ideas with you.

2009-05-12T19:47:00.004+12:00

Do you want to find out about dinosaurs?
Listen to Nikki read her story. You'll hear
a lot of information about these prehistoric
creatures.

Big and Mean

2009-05-07T20:12:00.003+12:00

Nikita loves dinosaurs, especially the big mean
ones.

Tyranosaurus-Rex

2009-05-07T20:00:00.004+12:00

Marama has been learning about dinosaurs.
Listen to her story and find out lots of
interesting information about the dinosaur
she likes best.

Bubbles

2009-05-04T11:43:00.004+12:00

Mikaiah's writing goal is to write interesting
recounts independently while attempting to
spell all unknown words. His writing about
the class bubble making activity shows that
he has been working hard to achieve his goal.

Our Trip to Youth Town

2009-04-06T11:48:00.003+12:00

Room 8 went on the bus to Youth Town to
practise using "The Pt. England Way".
Listen to Marama's recount of the great time
she had there and all the fun things she did.

The Barbeque

2009-04-05T21:28:00.005+12:00

Milaiah has been learning to work more
independently and include some interesting
details in is writing. Listen to him read his
recount and find out why he likes barbeques.

Camp Cooking

2009-03-26T12:44:00.003+13:00

Listen to Nikita's story and find out what she
saw happening at the school camp.

2009-03-25T22:05:00.003+13:00

Mikaiah has been trying really hard to make
his writing interesting for people to read or
listen to. He used some interesting words
to explain what kind of fruit he likes best.

Joephine's Cousin

2009-03-25T21:57:00.003+13:00

Josephine had a lovely outing with her kind
cousin. They had lots of fun together.

Cezar's Accident

2009-03-23T10:47:00.004+13:00

Cezar came to school bright and early to be
with his friends. Listen to his story to find
what happened to him while he was playing.
Poor old Cezar!

Apii's Weekend

2009-03-17T12:59:00.001+13:00

Apii had a lovely weekend with her family.
She wrote a recount about it so she could
share it with all her friends. Apii was very
proud of her writing because she used capital
letters and full stops when writing the sentences.
Her story was easy for her to read.

Mr Jacobsen you are funny.

2009-03-16T12:44:00.001+13:00

Marama loves going to Music with the class.
Mr Jacobsen the music teacher always makes
the children laugh and be happy. Marama
wrote a message to Mr Jacobsen when he was
sick. She wanted to cheer him up and make
him happy too.

Rave' Birthday

2009-03-15T12:31:00.005+13:00

Nikita was very happy when Rave brought
cupcakes to school on her birthday.
The whole class enjoyed them. Nikita wrote
about the cupcakes and tried really
hard to make her story sound interesting
when she read it.

School Days Week 4 Term 1

2009-03-08T15:31:00.005+13:00

Josephine had lots of fun playing tiggy with
her mother.

2009 and Going Places

2009-02-18T14:34:00.008+13:00

The Going Places group met this morning for the first time this year to talk about their new classes and what they have been doing this term. They were all excited to be part of this special group again this year. You will remember meeting them last year when they published their stories online and when they published their movie called "Apii's Hippo".